Episode I Script (CFSS) = Cropped Full Screen Shot Ext. Space After Crawl, use entire shot of ship approaching and heading toward TF ships. Int. Qui Gonn's ship Reverse the first two interior shots-- start favoring Qui Gonn, Q: "Captain, tell them we wish to board at... Cut to wide shot of all passengers Q: "once..." Captain: "Yes Sir." Cut to Med. Shot of Captain as she leans toward controls-- cut away before she talks-- Ext. Space Use whole shot of ship descending toward TF Starship. Bring up Sound F/X. No dialogue. Int. Landing dock Use frame-rate to slow down the landing and add more majestic music for truly awesome Star Wars landing (like Millenium Falcon landing on Death Star) Int. Hallway TC13 greets the Jedi. Int. Waiting Room TC 13 leads Jedi into the waiting room and leaves. The Jedi flip back their hoods-- (Change if possible: using the Full Screen edition, can we crop the same shot and create a close up of Qui Gonn as he flips back his hood? It would be great-- even if we can just use the Full Screen footage to create a closer shot of both of them as they reveal themselves. The current shot favors Obi Wan -- since he's the one OT character we're meeting. That's not appropriate for this edit if we can get around it). Can we improve the musical sting of their reveal? Harps isn't much of a cue. Then back to the master shot as they walk across and say their lines at the window. (But again, depending on what's possible with the Full Screen version -- close ups of Qui Gonn's bored expression here would help reinforce his malaise about this assignment.) ... INT. CONTROL ROOM (From the Jedi saying "the negotiations will be short.") CUT to just one (CFSS) close up of a hand hitting a console with droid icons (from the Gungan battle) -- the icon "stands" Cut to: INT. HALLWAY Droids with weapons march toward camera (add Imperial March type music -- the hammer is coming down). The idea is that the Jedi are about to be assassinated by their hosts without us knowing who they are or why they want to kill these guys. Use the two shots that currently follow the destruction of the Jedi's ship. First shot: Marching droids. Then, just a couple beats of the Side angle wide shot: The droids reach the door and halt. Third shot (grabbed from a few shots later): Closer front view of droids (continuity problem of yellow droid is there -- can we crop him out?) MUSIC HITTING CRESCENDO... then holding a suspenseful note that continues-- INT. WAITING ROOM -- ...as the Door opens-- (suspense, suspense) -- and TC13 enters with drinks. Jedi say lines; Qui Gonn takes the drink. MUSIC remains on the tense side, but still holding back-- INT. LANDING DOCK/QUI GONN'S SHIP The MUSIC does a sly lurch as the gun descends in the hanger -- the crew panics -- the gun fires -- the ship EXPLODES and the music hits its full throttle action tempo-- INT. WAITING ROOM The Jedi react to the explosion. The gas comes in. They hold their breath. INT. HALLWAY (Remembering that the droids are already at the door), cut to them opening the door and seeing the gas. Adjust their interaction per BOTF. TC13 comes out. The Jedi emerge. Battle Use all the battle footage in one stroke as the battle continues all the way to Obi Wan force pushing a group of droids away. INT. CONTROL DECK NOTE: ALL DIALOGUE IS TEMP (Use footage from talking to TC13 scene) (CFSS) Over Nute's shoulder, favoring flunky, hiding Nute's face. Flunky: "It has been a long time since you killed a Jedi. Let the droids handle it." Nute: "You prevent me from killing them?" CUT AWAY: the Jedi cut one more Droid down BACK TO SCENE (next shot favoring Flunky off Nute's shoulder) (CFSS) Flunky: "Your safety is vital-- The entire Trade Federation rests on your--" CUT AWAY: the Jedi cut another Droid down BACK TO SCENE Nute: "Get out of my sight." Flunky shrinks away -- using the "stunted slime" shot -- this is the first shot we get of Nute's profile. He turns toward camera (cut to CFSS on movement; add Nute Music Cue) -- cut away before Sidious image creeps in too much-- Nute: "Keeping me from my enemy endangers us all." Cut to shot of communications flunky with the mask Com Flunky: "We've lost their transmission sir." Next shot: Nute spins from the screen (currently where he says "What's going on down there?"). Nute: "Lead the Jedi here. I will show you what a Nemoidian is capable of!" Note Flunky #2 was in background of "stunted slime" shot. He now talks to Nute as they walk across the bridge toward the door together. Flunky #2: "Please, your Lordship, reconsider. If the Jedi should get lucky and harm you, our Federation will be destroyed by the Republic. We have arranged so much to make this invasion legal. Now is not the time to jeopardize things for sport. [an order to the driods] Seal the bridge." Nute: (Gesturing to the droids) "I will not forget this. You waste our time. The door is no match for Jedi." Flunky #2: "Send for Destroyers. These Jedi will fall quickly." The door closes on the bridge, sealing them in. INT. HALLWAY Obi Wan and Qui Gonn arrive outside the bridge. Q attacks the door. INT. CONTROL DECK (The shot where Nute says "That will hold them" as Flunky #2 stares at the door) Flunky #2 (awed tone) "Close the blast door." Nute (going crazy with desire to fight) "Let them in, the doors will not hold!" Too late, the blast door shots-- stopping Q's blade. INT. HALLWAY Qui Gonn thinks, plunges into the door again-- Force theme (no changes here for me) INT. CONTROL DECK Door gets hot. Flunky #2 points "They are still coming through!" Nute: "Why are you protecting me? I can smell them. Let them in!" INT. HALLWAY Qui Gonn continues -- INT. CONTROL DECK Flunky #2 turns to ask "Where are those Destroyer Droids?" Nute gives him dirty look. INT. HALLWAY Destroyer Droids arrive. (still no changes for me) The Jedi run. INT. CONTROL DECK Nute and Flunky #2 watch Jedi run. ("No match for Destroyer Droids") Communications Guy says "Sir, a transmission from the planet" Queen Amidala contacts them. Talk to Queen. Threaten her blatantly and brutally. End transmission. Nute orders invasion to begin "we will conquer them now." Cut to: Communications guy interrupts: The Jedi are in ventilation shaft. Cut to: Shot of Nute where he whips around and says "Close the blast doors!" Nute: "I want them! Bring them to me!" ... From Nute shouting for the Jedi's capture, we CUT TO: Ext. Amidala's castle -- establishing Int. Amidala's castle Wide shot. Then panning wide as Palpatine speaks -- gets cut off. Amidala asks "What happened?" Cut before we pan to Tanaka-- Governor dialogue: "Communications block means-- ...Invasion!" (dialogue as is -- I'm too lazy to type it) Wide shot -- Amidala: "The Federation wouldn't go that -- " (cut out Tanaka "checking the generator") Cut to Tanaka standing as he finishes his next line (which we also cut) -- (Amidala finishes): "...far." Tanaka turns as Amidala continues: "We must continue to rely on Negotiations." Governor: "Negotiations? Etc. Where are the ambassadors?" Cut to Amidala: "I will not condone a course that leads us to war!" (This is a little more mature version of the scene without Tanaka's pointless interruptions and opinions). CUT TO: EXT. STARSHIP - establishing shot Trick: f/x "flip" this shot so the droid ship is on Left with landing ships flying from it-- Musical sting. Only show for a second or two -- keep droid ship the focus, then cut -- INT. DROID LOADING HANGER Qui Gonn and Obi Wan fly out of vent into hanger. Jedi see droids loading. "We'll go with them." "Negotiations were short." CUT TO: EXT. NABOO Remaining portion of Droid loading ships flying in space -- toward planet (NOT reversed) The Droid ships hit ground EXT. LOADING SHIPS Droids unload. Droid Captain receives orders from Flunky and Nute: "Destroy everything in your path. Cause as much destruction as possible. We will conquer this world as our own. The Republic has been a thorn in our side long enough...!" EXT. FOREST SF/X -- ADD SOUNDS OF BLASTERS AND EXPLOSIONS THROUGHOUT First shot -- The Animals run from something we can't see (currently the third shot) Second shot -- The Transports crash through the trees Third shot -- From above, Qui Gonn runs ahead of the transports Forth shot -- From ahead of the transport -- Qui Gonn runs toward camera Fifth shot -- Close on Qui Gonn looking mad Sixth shot -- Med shot of Jar Jar in the way Seventh shot -- Close on Jar Jar panicking. Eighth-Tenth shot -- Qui Gonn tackles Jar Jar (cut faster -- from behind Jar Jar/from behind Qui Gonn/back to Jar Jar's back as they hit the deck -- it's a tackle; they fall FAST) Eleventh shot -- The Transport rides over them Qui Gonn stands -- cut to a CFSS of Jar Jar standing to avoid the "flip up" and to shorten this shot. They turn to leave -- Cut away while the Transports are still near. LEAVE SOUNDS VERY LOUD -- TRANSPORTS ARE ALL AROUND. ...